Hate to say it, but yes it was. No attachment to characters, unbelievable dialogue, and considering how important dialogue was in this piece, that's not good. If you were just fucking around for fun I'll leave it at that and let you know I got a little bit of a chuckle, but if you're semi-serious about writing I can try and give you what tips I can.
I'm pretty sure it's spelled "spoildmilk". Also, my alternate ego is Ergox from time to time
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sorry but i put no effort to it i just kinda WUSH made it and here it is :)
Fair enough.
yup
Mr.Spoild you win the nobel prize
yay!
I don't understand why you would spend time writing this, why do you rub?
what can i say, i'm a rub off
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the fuck
spit
sinfulwolf
Uh... I'd leave a critique but I have a sneaking suspicion you don't want to hear anything said against you.
spoildmilk
was my story that bad? :(